Excellent work Anderson. You've made a bunch of really great caps lately (the bimbo ones have really been tickling my fancy) and this is kind of the epitome of all that excellent work. Great dialogue, image, slow build that leads up right to a suspenseful cliffhanger. Keep up the awesome job!
Hi Anderson, long time reader/fan. This comment is going to be a little mean, but I hope it's taken as constructive criticism. I just caught up on all of your work, and wanted to "finish" with a story that looked really hot, when upon the last sentence I read "the person who is going to inherit my fortune is..."Isn't the point of a cliffhanger to build suspense in the audience which will then possibly be relieved, perhaps in another chapter? Or at least let the reader's imagination play out the ending? Well in this case that's all well and good, but wasn't he supposed to be tricking them in the first place? (see: "sucker") So then what? We have to pick who wins and we don't even get a legitimate ending? Now one of them gets a happy ending and let me tell you it wasn't me. Please don't get me wrong, I do like your work, and I've tried making my own and realize how hard it actually is. The only other comment I would like to make is I believe your work would greatly benefit from paying closer attention to your spelling.Sorry again, -a fan